You want to stick to the facts in the introduction letter. The coach wants to see
things in black and white. At this point it doesn't matter if you say you are a hard
worker or a motivated leader. They want information that is going to differentiate
you from all of the other players that are contacted them.
The other important aspect is to make sure there is an action point at the end
of the email. The action point should be to follow up with a telephone call or to
arrange a campus visit.
Here is a sample letter:
My name is Chris Meade. I am a junior at Islip High School in New York. I play attack.
I am narrowing my list of potential colleges to apply to and Wesleyan University is at
the top of my list. As an athlete, your team's competitive schedule for the 2012 season
and the challenge of helping (specific college) become a top notch Division 3 Lacrosse
program is very attractive. Also, as an honor roll student enrolled in AP classes, I am
interested in the school's strong academic reputation, in particular the International
Last season, I played on Islip's Varsity squad scoring 34 goals and 28 assists. During
the summer, I play for the LI Stallions, a travel team on Long Island. I am going to
attend Good to Great at Amherst in July and Blue Chip 225.
To view my transcript and highlight reel, please click the embedded link below. Please
let me know the best way to go about scheduling a campus tour. I look forward to
hearing from you.